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Plastic Play-doh people
Shaped in the suburban press
And pushed into the same mould
Over and over and over

Living in Lego brick houses
The same square shapes
All perfectly placed in plastic
Over and over and over

Working for workers
Who like to play dress-up
Pretending to be perfect
Over and over and over

If life is a game
Then we are the toys
Counting down like clockwork
Til it's over
Yay for alliteration...this is what happens when I get way too sleep deprived to think straight anyway enjoy!
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Fateless-No-Forever Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Mmm, putting it all bluntly out to be admired. ^^ Nicely done, I like it, especially because I used to play with both play-dough and legos a lot.
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TheBlackWolfBoy Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011   Writer
Thanks, blunt is kinda how I right I think :)
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Fateless-No-Forever Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think so, too. ^^ You're welcome.
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AwPretty Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011
I love that Play-doh people are living in Lego Houses, very good analige for what has happened to our sasiatey. The end seems a bit forced / a let down from the other stanzas', no offence! But if we're all just toys, then we're waiting on our little girls
or boys to gorw up and
throw us away, never remembering
the joys of their yesterday .....
well, that honestly doesn't fit either so forget that ^^; but still, you have a finely written poem here :]
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TheBlackWolfBoy Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011   Writer
None taken, I honestly wasn't sure how to end it, Thankyou for taking the time to read it :D
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AwPretty Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011
Happy of that then, sorry you weren't but to be honest your current ending isn't all that bad just doesn't seem to flow with the rest of it, You're very welcome :]
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AnastasiasDecember Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
well that sure is something =P meee likey :D
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TheBlackWolfBoy Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011   Writer
Yay Thanks :D
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AnastasiasDecember Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
you're veeerrryy welcome :D
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